"Lobters" Discussion

The biggest thing that stood out to me, and made me think more about the poem is what Levi said about the slave trade metaphor. That really made me rethink the poem in its entirety. I got the basics about the poem, but the discussion really helped me look at the entire thing, not just the things I saw.

After the discussion, I took some time to read over the poem again. This time I really tried to analyze it for the slave trade metaphors and I found many more things than I did the first time I read it. What Levi said changed my whole theme statement and thesis and made me rethink the whole entire poem.

5 part paragraph critiques

There were many good paragraphs throughout the last couple of weeks, there were even some great ones. Yet others weren't as good as I thought they could've been. For instance fundamental mistakes that you could have caught if you just read through it one more time. Proof reading would benefit people that didn't have the "great" paragraphs the most. Even though some people didn't have the great paragraphs, others did. It takes a lot of skill to write a good five part paragraph, I know from writing them the last months, it's hard! You have to find something you want to set out to prove, find the quotes to prove it from the books, and the hardest part, writing commentary to support why it proves your topic! So much stuff!

I did write a five part paragraph and got critique on it, even though I was one of the last ones. I thought I did a pretty good job for this being my first five part paragraph. Even though I felt confident, reading out loud really showed how much I could have improved it. The main thing I probably should have done was read through it one more time just to make sure there were no "awkward sentences" or spelling errors. And maybe just spending the extra time to make sure that I had the best quotes I can find from the book to support my topic, or thought a little bit harder to make sure I wrote the absolutely best commentary I could. Although I probably could have done better on my paragraph, I know what to do in the future so I can write the absolute best I can!